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confessions of a broken heart by ~vermillionaura:iconvermillionaura:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Emotional


Pain... Tension... Fatigue...
Depression...
Anger, Aggression, Frustration.
All these unwanted sensations -
Burning, hurting, tearing.
My heart alone, cold and fearing.
Why won't you let me sleep, let me rest,
Let me forget
To eradicate, eliminate, destroy all my regrets?
These memories inside, swirling, twirling,
unwilling to reside in the corner of my mind.
Repeating, resisting, insisting -
Refusing to be denied its recognition
Of its position in my
Frustration, Confusion, Delusion.
Ah, to close my eyes and let time fly by,
Because there's so much to gain
By forgetting these dreams driving me insane.
Unfocused, unclear, out of control,
My world spinning, spinning, spinning,
My sanity flying through the door.
My reason, my logic, oh, it's tragic,
Like fine sands running through my hands,
I'm losing my mind.


                        
©2003-2009 ~vermillionaura
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Well this is an odd turn of events now isn't it folks! A poem from moi with no hint of my usual sensuality! :giggle: But seriously folks:

When you lose a loved one, your feelings are very volatile. You begin to
tumble, crash and fall through ever minute and every second that he/she is
gone. Like living in the shadow of yourself, you begin to fade in and out
of life, unfinished incomplete, Broken hearted...

The road back to your former self is so long...and as for my journey...my feet are too weak to take the first step....
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~soulwrai:iconsoulwrai: Oct 13, 2003, 11:00:09 AM
I feel you on this piece, I wish I could write half as well as you do, fav for sure

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~Shiniki:iconShiniki: Oct 13, 2003, 11:05:46 AM
Excellent imagery, strong emotion... :tears:

Don't give up. Dance like no one's watching and love like it'll never hurt. :hug:

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Mmm... Sacrilicious...
=blameshiori:iconblameshiori: Oct 13, 2003, 11:11:33 AM
:(

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~decayingyouth:icondecayingyouth: Oct 13, 2003, 1:00:13 PM
(speaking from experience)the expression of those emotions is the first step to finding yourself again. keep writing what you feel. even if it doesnt sound that great it will help. this type of writing lets you know you are not completely dead inside.

:hug: :hug: :hug: :hug: :hug: :hug: :hug: :hug: :hug: :hug:

it is a great piece. :D

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~benelterfleck:iconbenelterfleck: Oct 13, 2003, 2:38:57 PM
We've all been there. It gets, better, but never completely goes away. You are very lucky to be able to verbalize such feelings. For most people trying to express those emtions can be the hardest part. It takes someone with a good grasp of self to be able to isolate and desribe whats going on in that hurricane of the mind.

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And that's exactly why blind people don't sky dive.
~l0Rd-n1k0n:iconl0Rd-n1k0n: Oct 13, 2003, 2:42:32 PM
why r u discribing my feelings ??

+fav

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~ikaridire:iconikaridire: Oct 13, 2003, 6:57:55 PM
I'm really sorry...I don't really know what else to say...I hope the hole he left gaping open is filled quickly...

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~Doust19:iconDoust19: Oct 13, 2003, 7:57:31 PM
Awesome, awesome rhythm! It's definately what made that one so good. :D
~xhileno:iconxhileno: Oct 13, 2003, 8:00:10 PM
:aww: my stomach hurts after reading this poem... :( i've been here too... many times. good thing we have friends to talk to about all this stuff. :hug:

"Like fine sands running through my hands,
I'm losing my mind."

Do you know why i like this line? it's because this similie expresses it all. i've lost loved ones as these fine sands you describe as well as i lost my mind. i've lost hope, love, and myself. this is truly a great poem... :+fav: :hug:

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